Oil has seemed to create more problems within our country.
Shouldn’t we be saying it effects a million others because our desire and
conquest for oil is ridiculously high? James Surowiecki’s bold approach is
trying to dissuade free trade. His sole purpose is to convince that if being in
the economic market’s not meant for the solders, or the private companies that
are supplying them to fight for the
resources we need, then having an open market is not worth it.
In some cases, I feel like Surowiecki is raising a lot of
solid issues. The U.S. is always getting involved. His first example of how
Dick Cheney found it wasn’t enough just to fix Iraq’s oil fields – considering he’s
making an assumption that other countries might not have been as aggressive about
it as we seemed – was a transition for a
major claim. He goes on to explain that these private markets turned the
military into profit making men. He carries a strong tone. In most cases he’s
trying to open people’s eyes and the way to do it would be to use army men to
bring pathos. I felt concerned, fearful of what would happen just because the
government is interested in money.
The further you read, the more it seems like he’s trying to
emphasize that there’s no wiggle room in the market. It’s like these solders
are being used so more private corporations can be made. That further implies that
the U.S. will continue getting into wars – and that would just worsen the
country. He labels the relationship between army men and business as a “complex
partnership,” and goes on to say how they’ll deal with both “Joint Chief of
Staff,” and C.E.O.’s of Halliburton. Halliburton caused a lot of problems. They’re
linked to about 80 other countries and he neglects to mention that as well as
K.B.R., a partner of the company that does American engineering, construction,
and private military contracting. The fact that he’s not giving a background
check of the “designated villain and his side kick,” weakens his logos, &
credibility only proving that protectionism is a bad idea.
The more you read, the more biased it may seem. It all goes
back to the initial statement of how he’s trying to prove that it’s wrong that
manipulation of these army men don’t matter to the government. And yet, through
protectionism, we’re depending on these jobs to be created. Yes we can avoid expenses,
and retain control, but it’s only the surface of the issue. It makes me
question who he is to be saying that outsourcing won’t benefit us; that other
countries will just take the lead any ways? It’s sad to say, what makes him so
strong would have to be his diction and metaphors. Especially how the army is a
“lean mean killing machine” – possibly meaning they do all the work, “while
civilians peel the potatoes and clean the latrines.” As well as his final
statement using iron and blood. As he concludes, he states “Don’t outsource the
iron until you can outsource the blood.” By having these men do private business,
relating the army, it promotes war. One, we’d be out of the loop in the
economic chain, and Two, promoting war still won’t help us. Blood has been shed
already, in terms of men and failures. Iron meaning our outputs.
Chyna, this is a fine reaction but Have a thesis in your intro that connects WHAT he says with HOW he says it. Add a stylistic component. When you talk about tone, be specific--"strong" is too vague.
ReplyDeleteYou're mentioning some decent points and definitely looking at his technique here, but a more solid shape and definition of your argument would make this more effective.
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